Comments on: Could you please tell me what you think of my short story? its cheesy and naff? http://www.freevinotips.com/tips-on-buying-wine/could-you-please-tell-me-what-you-think-of-my-short-story-its-cheesy-and-naff Welcome to free vino tips, we are glad you are here to share our journey to learn about wine. We will learn together some things, and we will teach you something, and you will teach us some things! Don't hesitate to comment, ask questions or provide Wed, 11 Nov 2009 11:13:07 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.0.1 By: Maddy http://www.freevinotips.com/tips-on-buying-wine/could-you-please-tell-me-what-you-think-of-my-short-story-its-cheesy-and-naff/comment-page-1#comment-3900 Maddy Fri, 26 Jun 2009 20:08:59 +0000 http://www.freevinotips.com/tips-on-buying-wine/could-you-please-tell-me-what-you-think-of-my-short-story-its-cheesy-and-naff#comment-3900 The story is interesting, but while our narrator was waiting all that time with the monologue, it was disappointing that no one showed up. Rather anticlimactic. But maybe the rest of the story justifies this? To become a great writer, you must take my criticism as well. There are a few spelling errors here or there such as: willilingly -> willingly kerb -> curb. and any #'s in written work should be written (unless it's a research report with data) in full form. Such as 5 minutes into "five minutes" However, I enjoyed reading this - so if you edit your work, I'll give it a twice over if you need a reader.<br><b>References : </b><br>Writing two novels at the same time. whew. The story is interesting, but while our narrator was waiting all that time with the monologue, it was disappointing that no one showed up. Rather anticlimactic. But maybe the rest of the story justifies this?

To become a great writer, you must take my criticism as well. There are a few spelling errors here or there such as:
willilingly -> willingly
kerb -> curb.
and any #’s in written work should be written (unless it’s a research report with data) in full form. Such as 5 minutes into "five minutes"

However, I enjoyed reading this – so if you edit your work, I’ll give it a twice over if you need a reader.
References :
Writing two novels at the same time. whew.

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